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Sigurdur.

Another Blues to loose track 29

Composition :
OK in the style.
It would have been nice with some chromatic lines: it also would have been more of a challenge.

Voicings : OK
You use mostly diatonic approach, witch gives the arrangement a good flow, but it is also a little conform.
The minor second clashes in bar 1, 2, ( and 7)and 9 could be an effect, but then I think it should be more
obvious as a rhythmic motive. But that is your choice!
I don’t like the b9 interval in bar 4
4th voice awkward in bar 2.
But I like it very much in bar 6
Bar 9 : more Gm thank you.

See..! Minor Problem!!
(linear) track 30
Nice work
I would awoid the crossing of voices in bar 3 though.
tjek my bar 4 ???
Beginning of 5 a little to harsh. Tjek mine !!
The rest I like very much.

See..! Minor Problem!! basic
I would like a G7 on beat 4 in bar 3
I don’t like minor second clashes (bar 4) but its a choice ?
I see the point in swopping the voices to awoid repetitions of a note, but I wouldent do it in a tune like this.

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